Round 2: Alice's Bye

SOmeone didn't Submit!

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Use this as your Title "The (Object that you choose) was more interesting"

This is ALice's Bye Round.

Damn it, are you serious???

Nope. All a clever ruse to trick you. In reality, the other guy's post is INVISIBLE.

Don't worry, I'll still comment.

Author A: Your piece is audacious in its lack of structure and form; by disregarding all writing conventions and embracing nihilism, you're clearly attempting to create a void into which reader/participants can pour themselves, making them author and co-author of the work. While I applaud taking such chances, it doesn't really work in this context. It left me feeling hollow and empty.

Author B: I'd say that this piece qualifies as either fantasy or historical fiction, but my apalling lack of knowledge about classical Far Eastern culture makes it impossible for me to tell. In either case, you're able to present and build a cultural milieu very well, without buckling under the weight of exposition as many similarly-concieved tales do.

I especially like the tone of the piece--very simple and strightforward; unadorned, yet pleasing and compelling. You're clearly trying to write in the style of an old tale, and it succeeds. I was also intrigued by your use of the prompt, which was fascinating to say the least.

The only real flaw I can discern is that the entire story is essentially setup for a single twist, and that there's comparatively little beyond that. Still, it was enough of an enjoyable reading experience that this was easy to overlook, as was the unhappy ending (which I've come to expect from all WoTW tales). Good job.

Definitely Author B. Nihilism just can't compete with substance